A New Tomorrow 7 (4:42:14 PM): hey, how goes the screenplay project?
Dave Jericho (4:42:29 PM): good
Dave Jericho (4:42:35 PM): have you seen the new trailers?
A New Tomorrow 7 (4:42:52 PM): yeah
Dave Jericho (4:43:44 PM): both of them?
A New Tomorrow 7 (4:44:01 PM): yup
A New Tomorrow 7 (4:44:30 PM): i think the second one was better because of the pictures/voiceover
A New Tomorrow 7 (4:47:03 PM): although on both, the text went a lot more slowly than i read
A New Tomorrow 7 (4:47:19 PM): are you planning to do another one once you start filming and have actual footage to work with?
Dave Jericho (4:48:26 PM): oh yeah
Dave Jericho (4:48:34 PM): i am going to make lots of those
Dave Jericho (4:48:41 PM): i am just getting started
Dave Jericho (4:48:46 PM): i have just leanred how to do it
A New Tomorrow 7 (4:48:53 PM): cool
A New Tomorrow 7 (4:50:13 PM): have you done any more writing or had any new ideas?
Dave Jericho (4:50:42 PM): oh yeah
Dave Jericho (4:51:05 PM): i have started drawing pictures as concepts for some of the big battle scenes
A New Tomorrow 7 (4:51:13 PM): hmm
Dave Jericho (4:51:25 PM): i am not sure how they are going to translate on to screen thou
A New Tomorrow 7 (4:51:41 PM): yeah, i was actually thinking about that a bit the other day
Dave Jericho (4:51:50 PM): yeah
A New Tomorrow 7 (4:52:02 PM): i came up with a couple ways you could approach it
A New Tomorrow 7 (4:53:40 PM): one is that you could use small scale models to illustrate what's happening
Dave Jericho (4:53:56 PM): that is cool
Dave Jericho (4:54:06 PM): i was thinking about some kind of animation
A New Tomorrow 7 (4:54:35 PM): second, you could not actually show much of the actual battles, but rather cut back and forth between the enemy camps as they find out what's going on and show the things they say to each other and the plans they make
A New Tomorrow 7 (4:54:57 PM): i think they used the second approach in
Dave Jericho (4:58:32 PM): that is good
A New Tomorrow 7 (4:58:43 PM): or, of course, a mix of both
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:06:10 PM): also, i was thinking that you might want to reorganize the continuity... right now you have the aftermath of the war in Act I, the things that led up to the war in Act II, and the actual events of the war in Act V... it might be better to do it in chronological order
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:06:43 PM): although it might still work to start it off with the meeting with the general after the war and then go back to show how it all happened
Dave Jericho (5:08:30 PM): now are you talking just for reading the screenplay or for the actual movie it's self
Dave Jericho (5:09:17 PM): i think that you are right, the reading of the screenplay should be in order, but for the final production on screen, i like the mixed order
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:09:37 PM): really?
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:09:43 PM): i was talking about the final project
Dave Jericho (5:10:36 PM): that is an issue that we can deal with after it is filmed
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:10:59 PM): well, see, the biggest thing is that Act I tells the reader a lot of what happens in Acts II and V
Dave Jericho (5:11:02 PM): i agree that i should change it for reading purposes just to make it easier to understand
Dave Jericho (5:11:37 PM): so should it go Act II, Act V, Act I?
Dave Jericho (5:11:55 PM): Act 2, 5, 1, 3, 4
Dave Jericho (5:12:00 PM): or
Dave Jericho (5:12:12 PM): Act 2, 3, 4, 5, 1
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:12:56 PM): well, i think it would be okay to start off with parts of Act I, like the interview with Justice and maybe Avarice... but other parts, like the part where Charity and Justice are discussing what to do with the prisoners should come at the end, I think
Dave Jericho (5:13:43 PM): ok, very good
Dave Jericho (5:13:49 PM): oh i have good news for you
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:14:04 PM): yeah?
Dave Jericho (5:15:33 PM): i read somewhere that in a screenplay, the writer should let the bad guy tell portions of the main plot, this builds a better stronger story, so i am going to give Avarice more sceens very soon, I have also given him a new counterpart...
Dave Jericho (5:16:00 PM): Admiral Greed, second in command and comanding officer of the battleships
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:16:05 PM): ah, cool
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:16:40 PM): henchmen are nice to have
Dave Jericho (5:16:46 PM): he also leads all battles, because Avarice is too impoprtant to risk his life going onto the battlefield
Dave Jericho (5:17:51 PM): Avarice is a gentleman, only acting behind the lines, masterminding all the plans, but never actually fighting
Dave Jericho (5:18:18 PM): he will of course find himself in a fight one on one with justice at the end
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:18:28 PM): ah, cool
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:18:34 PM): that should be fun
Dave Jericho (5:18:56 PM): in which he does have to kick some butt because he did get to where he is by kicking ass
Dave Jericho (5:19:20 PM): but he loses the battle with justice and is taken prisoner
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:19:41 PM): yeah, one of those guys who can hold his own in a fight if he has to... but why risk it, unless he's forced into it?
Dave Jericho (5:20:09 PM): that is the very end of the play, and the begginning of the sequal
Dave Jericho (5:20:17 PM): yes yes
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:20:56 PM): i actually have a friend of mine who we might be able to cast as Greed... he and I have acted together before, and I think we play off each other well
Dave Jericho (5:21:21 PM): i feel the need to tell you, i am going to save our AIM converstaion because they provide very good material for writing
Dave Jericho (5:21:29 PM): ok, that would be very good
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:21:42 PM): alright, yeah
Dave Jericho (5:21:55 PM): i was thinking about making greed fat, but i am not sure
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:22:13 PM): i'm actually looking at it right now and thinking about how things could be done
Dave Jericho (5:22:18 PM): he is weak thou, always fearful of not being accepted as an Elite
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:22:31 PM): well, my friend isn't quite fat, but he has a heavier build
Dave Jericho (5:22:55 PM): it doesn;'t matter\
Dave Jericho (5:23:00 PM): we can figure it out
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:23:16 PM): yeah
Dave Jericho (5:23:15 PM): tell him to join the facebook group
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:23:21 PM): alright
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:23:31 PM): oh, another thing i was thinking about
Dave Jericho (5:23:32 PM): tell anyone that is interested in actually working on the play
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:23:59 PM): you have this scene where Jack is interviewing the General and having him read the statement of purpose
Dave Jericho (5:24:23 PM): yeah
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:26:01 PM): instead, what if you have either Justice or the Professor read it out loud to a delegation/group... i think you talk in here about how there was a meeting on campus about what should be done about inequality in the world, and you can have them think and talk about it for a few days, and then have this declaration as the culmination of their deliberations, to be met with general applause by the audience
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:26:13 PM): i think that could be a powerful scene, in a cinematic sense
Dave Jericho (5:26:56 PM): very good idea
Dave Jericho (5:27:06 PM): i like it it
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:29:52 PM): and that could be the culmination of Act II... you show the people gathered here, give them a chance to air their grievances and discuss what should be done, and then read the declaration as the end product of all their efforts
Dave Jericho (5:30:24 PM): i like it
Dave Jericho (5:31:31 PM): i want get the main cast together asap and talk about getting this thing on film
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:31:52 PM): alright
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:32:01 PM): do you have any of the other parts cast?
Dave Jericho (5:32:19 PM): i am shooting to have a cast meeting by the end of january
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:32:25 PM): cool
Dave Jericho (5:32:57 PM): i have someone that i am going to do voice work with, most likey for the voice of Jack, who is going to tell alot of the story, but he is never onscreen
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:33:07 PM): ah
Dave Jericho (5:33:19 PM): i still need to find justice and charity
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:33:39 PM): i don't really know too many actors
Dave Jericho (5:33:43 PM): justice is the main part, so he might be the hardest to find
Dave Jericho (5:34:01 PM): he also have to be a good actor
Dave Jericho (5:34:11 PM): charity has to be hot
Dave Jericho (5:34:47 PM): she is not going to be that hard to find, because their at lots of females that want to be in movies
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:35:19 PM): true.
Dave Jericho (5:36:03 PM): as for the professor, i was thinking about getting a actual professor, but that might look funny
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:36:08 PM): haha
Dave Jericho (5:36:16 PM): if everyone else is really young
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:36:21 PM): just get someone who can talk like one
Dave Jericho (5:36:27 PM): lol
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:38:07 PM): yeah, should work out... it doesn't look like there are all that many parts
Dave Jericho (5:38:40 PM): yeah
Dave Jericho (5:38:57 PM): the sequal can have more parts
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:39:18 PM): yeah, you should have some publicity built up by then
Dave Jericho (5:39:56 PM): yeah
Dave Jericho (5:40:17 PM): i am also thinking that this screenplay could be worked out into a live production
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:40:29 PM): yeah, that would be cool
Dave Jericho (5:40:36 PM): people love live plays
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:40:43 PM): stage plays are awesome
Dave Jericho (5:40:58 PM): and they would come and listen to my message
Dave Jericho (5:41:07 PM): and it would be good
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:41:35 PM): and entertaining
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:44:08 PM): have you given any thought to filming locations/costumes?
Dave Jericho (5:44:27 PM): alot of thought into costumes
Dave Jericho (5:44:39 PM): well what the general is going to where
Dave Jericho (5:44:56 PM): he has to wear a uniform of somekind
Dave Jericho (5:45:07 PM): limitted to what our budge can get
Dave Jericho (5:45:34 PM): but any military uniform, from any country, spiced up a but should do
Dave Jericho (5:46:02 PM): as for the first scene, i want it filmed completely in an office
Dave Jericho (5:46:12 PM): a nice office
Dave Jericho (5:46:31 PM): we are going to have to find one that will let us film in it for a few hours
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:48:06 PM): ah
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:48:23 PM): i gave a bit of thought to Avarice, and came up with several different looks for him
Dave Jericho (5:48:31 PM): very good
Dave Jericho (5:48:45 PM): you can be completly in charge of what he looks like
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:49:12 PM): one is just all dressed up with a suit and tie, and that's for business meetings, interviews, when he wants to impress or persuade people
Dave Jericho (5:49:27 PM): good
Dave Jericho (5:49:36 PM): you have a such a suit?
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:50:10 PM): two is his war garb, which would be a military uniform of some kind, and that's when all the persuasive words and diplomacy is put aside and it's time to use force
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:50:23 PM): yeah, i do have a suit
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:50:48 PM): and if there's an army surplus store around here, we might be able to get a couple cheap uniforms
Dave Jericho (5:51:04 PM): awesome
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:51:32 PM): three is postwar Avarice, after the fortress falls and he goes into hiding... in that one, he'll be dressed in rags, or perhaps wrapped in a blanket
Dave Jericho (5:51:34 PM): i am thinking about hiring a girl to be in charge of costumes
Dave Jericho (5:51:53 PM): nice!!
Dave Jericho (5:52:25 PM): i have $1,000 to spend on this production
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:53:33 PM): in the first two, i would wear my hair up in a ponytail that was doubled over at the base of my skull so it looks somewhat formal, in the third, i would just have it all loose
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:53:54 PM): yeah, i think i can provide most of what i need for that, with the exception of a uniform
Dave Jericho (5:54:18 PM): awesome
Dave Jericho (5:54:49 PM): very good sam, this is the kind of energy this production needs
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:54:58 PM): haha, thanks
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:55:03 PM): i'm excited to start working on it
Dave Jericho (5:55:43 PM): well i absoultely must be completed before the end of the semester, so we should get started asap
Dave Jericho (5:56:12 PM): and we can film in any order
Dave Jericho (5:56:26 PM): so we can film your scenes first
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:56:39 PM): alright
Dave Jericho (5:56:39 PM): because Avarice has a few scenes alone
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:57:07 PM): i'm ready to go pretty much at any point, though i would need to get my suit from home unless i could find one to borrow
Dave Jericho (5:58:02 PM): ok, well lets plan on doing something next week
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:58:11 PM): alright
Dave Jericho (5:58:15 PM): this will give us plenty of time to get ready
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:58:21 PM): do you have filming equipment?
Dave Jericho (5:58:33 PM): not yet, but i am goingt to soon
Dave Jericho (5:58:46 PM): you should open your own blogger page
A New Tomorrow 7 (5:58:54 PM): i have one, though i never use it
Dave Jericho (6:00:41 PM): what kind of weapons do you see Avarice having
Dave Jericho (6:00:58 PM): Justice has a sword
A New Tomorrow 7 (6:01:53 PM): hmm
A New Tomorrow 7 (6:02:05 PM): sword against sword would be neat
Dave Jericho (6:02:30 PM): generals dont usally fight with guns
Dave Jericho (6:03:08 PM): sword play os always good on screen and you do like fencing, so swords seem natural
A New Tomorrow 7 (6:03:20 PM): yeah, i love movie sword fights
Dave Jericho (6:03:37 PM): ok, this is good, because this is action that is much needed
Dave Jericho (6:03:56 PM): actions that is completely with in our means to film
Dave Jericho (6:04:07 PM): what kind of sword, and can you get one...
A New Tomorrow 7 (6:04:49 PM): umm... well, probably a rapier/sabre or longsword
A New Tomorrow 7 (6:05:30 PM): i think generals traditionally used sabres, and a rapier was the gentleman's weapon
Dave Jericho (6:05:44 PM): ok
A New Tomorrow 7 (6:05:59 PM): those were also the types that were used the latest
A New Tomorrow 7 (6:06:55 PM): i have no idea how to get them, though
Dave Jericho (6:07:49 PM): i will figure something out
Dave Jericho (6:08:06 PM): what about the ones that the fencing clubs use?
A New Tomorrow 7 (6:08:19 PM): check online to see if you can find a company that makes replica weapons for props in theatrical productions
Dave Jericho (6:08:43 PM): ok, i would love to buy one anyways, so that would be a good investment
A New Tomorrow 7 (6:08:52 PM): yeah, true
A New Tomorrow 7 (6:09:07 PM): the problem with the ones for fencing is that they don't look realistic
Dave Jericho (6:09:21 PM): ok
A New Tomorrow 7 (6:14:06 PM): it would indeed be a good investment, though
A New Tomorrow 7 (6:14:22 PM): and i think we can probably get through much of the production without spending a lot of money on props
A New Tomorrow 7 (6:28:58 PM): also, are you planning on using all the educational material in the screen play in the actual production?
Dave Jericho (6:29:24 PM): i want to
A New Tomorrow 7 (6:30:22 PM): well, the only problem is keeping people's interest
A New Tomorrow 7 (6:31:34 PM): generally, people are willing to sit through longer explanations when they're reading a book than when they're watching a movie
A New Tomorrow 7 (6:34:20 PM): found a local army navy surplus store http://www.saratogaarmynavy.com/
Dave Jericho (6:41:51 PM): cool
A New Tomorrow 7 (6:56:16 PM): alright, well i'm going to go find something to eat
Dave Jericho (6:56:30 PM): i will catch you later buddy
A New Tomorrow 7 (6:56:34 PM): alright
Dave Jericho (6:56:34 PM): thanks for the input
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:04:19 AM): just read your screenplay.
Dave Jericho (2:04:28 AM): yeah
Dave Jericho (2:04:34 AM): what did you think?
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:04:38 AM): its interesting
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:05:15 AM): also, if by any chance you need someone to portray a villain of most heinous and unspeakable quality in the filming of this screenplay, look me up
Dave Jericho (2:05:45 AM): that roll is open
Dave Jericho (2:06:04 AM): Avarice is his name
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:06:09 AM): cool
Dave Jericho (2:06:24 AM): yeah and the screenplay is fare from finished
Dave Jericho (2:06:43 AM): and i am going to direct it myself
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:06:50 AM): if i do this, i would like to have creative input into the development of my character... subject to your final approval, as the creator of the screenplay, which i will comply with completely
Dave Jericho (2:08:22 AM): absolutely, i actually was hoping to have the actors develop their own characters. The only characters that I need to developed in the script are Justice and Jack, all the other characters develop on their own
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:08:37 AM): excellent
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:08:47 AM): one of my ambitions in life has been to be a movie villain
Dave Jericho (2:08:56 AM): this is good
Dave Jericho (2:09:11 AM): Avarice is one hell of a villain
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:09:53 AM): alright, here's what i was thinking, as sort of a preliminary thing...
Dave Jericho (2:09:57 AM): he thinks that it is ok to let babies and children die when he is buying a new pool for his 7th house
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:10:15 AM): most of the characters in your screen play seem to be based on universal virtues/vices
Dave Jericho (2:10:25 AM): yeah
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:11:03 AM): and his history seems to go from World War II (helping Hitler to power) to the present day
Dave Jericho (2:11:37 AM): maybe more of the cold war era but yes continue
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:11:44 AM): so... in a way, it seems like he, and Justice, and Charity are timeless and more than human in a way... almost demigod-like
Dave Jericho (2:12:00 AM): yeah
Dave Jericho (2:12:08 AM): that is well put sir
Dave Jericho (2:12:30 AM): they are all part of the balance
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:12:31 AM): so I see them representing more universal things than just current political systems, like capitalism, socialism, etc
Dave Jericho (2:12:42 AM): this is good
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:12:47 AM): even though most of the people who work for Avarice are likely to be capitalists
Dave Jericho (2:12:53 AM): yes
Dave Jericho (2:13:02 AM): but he is bigger than that
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:13:45 AM): and Avarice rewards those who serve him (or are motivated only by greed) as opposed to the more utilitarian, populist nature of Justice or Charity
Dave Jericho (2:13:58 AM): yes
Dave Jericho (2:14:13 AM): he has alot of power, all fuel by greed
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:14:50 AM): so in a way, your play is about the overthrow of one timeless figure (Avarice) to be replaced by Justice and Charity
Dave Jericho (2:15:24 AM): yes, that is perfect, nicely said Sam
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:15:36 AM): haha, nice to use my english degree for something
Dave Jericho (2:16:03 AM): well i was hoping that it was that dynamic
Dave Jericho (2:16:23 AM): and i love writing the scenes, they are so much fun to write
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:16:36 AM): yeah, i was referring mostly to my analyzing the hell out of everything
Dave Jericho (2:17:06 AM): i love to hear feedback like that, thank you
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:17:15 AM): yeah, no prob
Dave Jericho (2:17:51 AM): you can write Act 1 Scene 4 "Interview with Greedy Capitalist if you like
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:18:24 AM): also, i think it's important to have a character like Avarice survive the end of the show, however beaten he might be... because a timeless character like that can never be destroyed... you can just get people to stop listening to him, which renders him powerless
Dave Jericho (2:18:38 AM): i was hoping to set the stage as director for these situations to build themselves
Dave Jericho (2:19:09 AM): I actually did have him survive
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:19:20 AM): capitalism was his great invention to be in control of the world system, and its collapse is a major setback, but i don't see him as one to give up.... he can still work on an individual level
Dave Jericho (2:19:41 AM): he was captured and forced to watch all of the war trials, as he was to be tried last
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:19:59 AM): ah, yeah
Dave Jericho (2:20:43 AM): depending on what the people want to do with him... it is up to the people democratic vote, and Charity to decide his fate
Dave Jericho (2:21:12 AM): i have ended this play before his trial
Dave Jericho (2:21:27 AM): so he survives to the next play
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:21:32 AM): i feel that there's a problem in killing off a representation of a timeless idea, though
Dave Jericho (2:22:08 AM): yeah, maybe at the end of a trilology
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:23:17 AM): perhaps... but i think a better way to deal with something like that is to show him destitute, dressed in rags, and disregarded at the end, but still nursing plots to regain power
Dave Jericho (2:24:19 AM): or to simply forgive because what is done is done, 2 wrongs dont make a right, kind of thing
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:24:26 AM): right
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:24:29 AM): true
Dave Jericho (2:24:41 AM): very good sam
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:24:50 AM): thanks
Dave Jericho (2:24:50 AM): i look forward to working with you
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:25:16 AM): yeah, it should be productive
Dave Jericho (2:25:15 AM): do you think this screen play has potential?
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:25:47 AM): i think it has potential... although there are also some suggestions i might make to improve it
Dave Jericho (2:26:01 AM): great
Dave Jericho (2:26:09 AM): put everything in writing
Dave Jericho (2:26:33 AM): i am going to work another 50 hours on this thing, you know, make it perfect
Dave Jericho (2:26:45 AM): and i always take suggestions
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:28:04 AM): alright, well acts 3 and 4 work out on paper, where you have all your sociology/philosophy papers, but i don't think you want to have the whole thing read when you actually tape it.... maybe have some discussion about what the most important parts are and include the essays as supplementary material when someone gets a copy of the finished show
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:28:31 AM): it would be really hard to maintain an audience's attention throughout a reading of all that text
Dave Jericho (2:28:39 AM): yeah
Dave Jericho (2:28:45 AM): it needs a lot of work
Dave Jericho (2:28:56 AM): but that is basically what is going to be said
Dave Jericho (2:29:03 AM): topics to be covered
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:29:26 AM): and... be careful in using other sources, such as Wikipedia or anything else.... copyright laws, etc
Dave Jericho (2:30:38 AM): i am going to write out more and fix theses scenes, but i am also interested in developing the characters and then working on making scenes that develop theses points
Dave Jericho (2:31:05 AM): it might be documentary style to keep cost production down
Dave Jericho (2:31:32 AM): you know, having a law professor talk about discrimination and so on
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:31:50 AM): also, there's a lot of information in this... before you start filming, i suggest you get a few friends together and do a read-through, and have a copy in hand, and pay attention to how this thing flows when its actually being read out, and edit the script accordingly
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:32:11 AM): that way you can have an idea of how your work plays out instead of going blindly into filming
Dave Jericho (2:32:26 AM): yup, that is always good
Dave Jericho (2:33:03 AM): i am going to need someone that has a really good voice for jack, although they never have to be on screen
Dave Jericho (2:33:33 AM): some scenes i am planning on filming without actors at all, just pictures and other stuff
Dave Jericho (2:33:50 AM): there is going to be music too
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:34:05 AM): and finally, think about the timeline... you have the aftermath of the great war, then the reasons why it was started, then the events itself... i'm not sure if that's the most logical way to lay it out
Dave Jericho (2:34:07 AM): i hear some opera somewhere in the play
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:34:10 AM): hmm, cool
Dave Jericho (2:34:38 AM): yeah
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:35:25 AM): i did like the storyline, though... seems like you put a lot of thought into it, and it makes all the difference between a dry, educational film and something that's fun to follow and educational at the same time
Dave Jericho (2:35:58 AM): yeah, you think so
i have such a hard time making things up, but battleships and redwings came so naturally to me
oh and artillery, i just love in visioning this stuff
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:36:53 AM): yeah, well its almost science fiction-like in a lot of ways
Dave Jericho (2:36:59 AM): it is so much fun
yeah, but with a hidden (or not so hidden )message
so it really is a strong story then
by the way, did you find jack useful and how long did it take you to read it
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:38:15 AM): yeah, it seems like a lot of elements of it haven't been fleshed out yet, but it does have potential, and it makes sense
well, i did it a bit at a time over a while, but probably an hour and a half, though i skimmed over acts 3 and 4
umm... i think a narrator is useful... i didn't feel like Jack had enough of a purpose as a character in his own right to set him apart from just a generic narrator
Dave Jericho (2:40:23 AM): I want to develop him much more, he is not real, he is supposed to be a BOT
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:40:31 AM): yeah
true
Dave Jericho (2:40:46 AM): did you like the interview style?
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:41:28 AM): yeah, i think it works out, but to really know these things, you'd have to read them out loud
Dave Jericho (2:42:01 AM): on the to do list is buy a mic, and start recording
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:42:09 AM): i suggest preparing two versions... one with the interview, one that's just a monologue, read them both out loud (or have them both read to you, ideally) and see which sounds better to you
Dave Jericho (2:43:11 AM): but I want someone else to theatrically read it, so that means that i need to write it better
Dave Jericho (2:43:25 AM): yeah that is a really good suggestion
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:44:41 AM): yeah, ive had some experience writing for the theatre, and one of the most valuable things in developing a piece is a read through... ideally, you shouldn't participate in the reading, but sit there with a copy of the script and a pen, making notes while people read it to you
Dave Jericho (2:45:40 AM): that is perfect, do you think that i will find people that will want to be in this play?
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:46:44 AM): well, it doesn't seem that there are too many parts... i'm sure you can find enough to fill it out
ask around
people seem to love being in movies
Dave Jericho (2:47:08 AM): awesome
yeah, there are only about 7 main characters
alright man, thanks for the feedback, please email me and tell me more about anything, i look forward to working with you
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:48:49 AM): alright
Dave Jericho (2:48:56 AM): as of right now, you can offiicially have the part of Avarice
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:49:36 AM): and... if you could write out an idea of what you have in mind for my scene, i would appreciate that, and then i could flesh it out
Dave Jericho (2:49:39 AM): i gtg to bed
awesome
thanks for everthing sam
have a good night
A New Tomorrow 7 (2:50:30 AM): hey, no problem
you too peace
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