A New Tomorrow 7 (2:05:06 PM) : hey... i got your feedback on my last scene
A New Tomorrow 7 (8:15:46 PM) : hey
Dave Jericho (8:15:50 PM) : sup
A New Tomorrow 7 (8:15:53 PM) : not too much
A New Tomorrow 7 (8:15:55 PM) : you?
Dave Jericho (8:16:12 PM) : im working on my business
A New Tomorrow 7 (8:16:17 PM) : ah, cool
A New Tomorrow 7 (8:16:22 PM) : what exactly are you doing for it?
Dave Jericho (8:16:32 PM) : i liked your scene
Dave Jericho (8:16:44 PM) : i am buying real estate and fixing it
Dave Jericho (8:16:57 PM) : making it better and refinancing it
A New Tomorrow 7 (8:17:04 PM) : cool
A New Tomorrow 7 (8:17:09 PM) : ah yeah, i got your feedback
Dave Jericho (8:17:31 PM) : yeah, it is alot of work, but i can make $50,000 a month if i work really hard
A New Tomorrow 7 (8:17:37 PM) : cool
Dave Jericho (8:18:09 PM) : that is company net total not all profit
Dave Jericho (8:18:28 PM) : i am going to make more like $10,000 a month personal profit
A New Tomorrow 7 (8:18:39 PM) : cool
A New Tomorrow 7 (8:19:27 PM) : anyway, i could write more scenes if you would like
Dave Jericho (8:19:37 PM) : most definately
A New Tomorrow 7 (8:19:40 PM) : but i'm not sure what else really needs to be written
Dave Jericho (8:19:58 PM) : you can write your own side story
Dave Jericho (8:20:10 PM) : ruthless dealings of avarice in the past
Dave Jericho (8:20:30 PM) : backstory, explaining his greed and evilness
A New Tomorrow 7 (8:20:38 PM) : hmm, that might work
Dave Jericho (8:20:40 PM) : or focus on his streghts and weakness
Dave Jericho (8:21:15 PM) : tell us more about this guy, has he had any lovers? does he have any children?
A New Tomorrow 7 (8:21:17 PM) : yeah, i've been trying to give him a characteristic that is the opposite of a classic mistake made by a lot of movie villains
Dave Jericho (8:21:50 PM) : and, you can draw a picture of him if you like
Dave Jericho (8:21:56 PM) : we need more concept art
Dave Jericho (8:22:03 PM) : orginal stuff you know
A New Tomorrow 7 (8:22:20 PM) : hmm... i can't draw all that well
A New Tomorrow 7 (8:23:16 PM) : but yeah... i'm sure you've seen a movie where the villain launches into a lengthy monologue about his plan and how it all worked out while he has his enemy at his mercy
Dave Jericho (8:23:34 PM) : yeah...
A New Tomorrow 7 (8:23:41 PM) : Avarice is the opposite. he takes pride in having people not fully understand his plans
A New Tomorrow 7 (8:23:53 PM) : because it makes him feel smarter than everyone else
A New Tomorrow 7 (8:24:01 PM) : i tried to get that out in his scenes with Greed
Dave Jericho (8:24:08 PM) : can the audience be told his master plan?
A New Tomorrow 7 (8:24:42 PM) : yeah, assuming it can be gotten out in a way that fits into the story
Dave Jericho (8:24:44 PM) : audiences love when they know something that the good guys don't
Dave Jericho (8:25:23 PM) : and the good guys walk right into a trap, that they saw coming, but the good guys had no idea
A New Tomorrow 7 (8:25:45 PM) : hmm
A New Tomorrow 7 (8:25:56 PM) : yeah, that's true
Dave Jericho (8:27:18 PM) : let me refer you to some reading...
Dave Jericho (8:28:01 PM) : check this out, you might like this
Dave Jericho (8:28:04 PM) : http://www.wordplayer.com/columns/welcome.html
A New Tomorrow 7 (8:28:36 PM) : hmm, cool
A New Tomorrow 7 (8:28:55 PM) : i think im trying to figure out what i need to write in order to fit into the main storyline
Dave Jericho (8:30:15 PM) : i would say anything that shows us more about how smart/evil/dedicated/greedy Avarice is would be relavent to the main plot
A New Tomorrow 7 (8:30:34 PM) : hmm, yeah
A New Tomorrow 7 (8:30:52 PM) : oh... and what do you have in mind for the final confrontation between he and Justice?
Dave Jericho (8:33:30 PM) : i think that justice should fight Greed and Avarice at once, Greed can kill one of justice's close allies and justice fights back even harder. justice attack greed head on, while avarice escapes. justice kills greed. mothns later, avarice is caputured...
A New Tomorrow 7 (8:34:28 PM) : hmm
A New Tomorrow 7 (8:34:47 PM) : does Justice capture Avarice himself, or does he send others to do it?
Dave Jericho (8:36:25 PM) : swat teams are circling the globle looking for Avarice. One swat team finds him and he kills them all. then justice himself finds his location and captures him with a small army a swat teams
A New Tomorrow 7 (8:36:44 PM) : alright
Dave Jericho (8:36:49 PM) : avarice surrenders
Dave Jericho (8:37:11 PM) : he knows that he can fight it out in the justice system
A New Tomorrow 7 (8:37:18 PM) : yeah
Dave Jericho (8:37:29 PM) : he gets a avery expensive lawyer
A New Tomorrow 7 (8:38:03 PM) : for some reason, i was imagining a one on one confrontation between the two on a cliff outside the cave that Avarice has been hiding in, resulting in him being subdued and captured
A New Tomorrow 7 (8:38:04 PM) : lol
Dave Jericho (8:38:23 PM) : nice
Dave Jericho (8:38:26 PM) : that can work
A New Tomorrow 7 (8:38:44 PM) : with a dialogue between the two beforehand
Dave Jericho (8:38:53 PM) : justice just has the backup of 1,000 men, but he says that he can deal with it one on one
A New Tomorrow 7 (8:39:02 PM) : yeah
A New Tomorrow 7 (8:39:26 PM) : i also think it would work best if it were the first time those two ever met face to face on screen
Dave Jericho (8:39:45 PM) : that is good sir...
A New Tomorrow 7 (8:40:17 PM) : Greed can go to fight Justice and his allies with a backup of some of his men
A New Tomorrow 7 (8:40:33 PM) : there can be a small skirmish, focusing mostly on the one on one between those two
A New Tomorrow 7 (8:40:38 PM) : meanwhile, Avarice gets away
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